英検２級の英作文の添削してほしいです！ 出来れば何点取れるのかもおしえてほしいです！。 問題 Some people say it is importamt to set clear goals when starting new activities. Do you think this is a good idea? 自分の回答 I think so.First, by setting clear goals, the efficiency will rise. This is because, people found that vhat to do nti they achieve goals.As a result, they will accomplish with ease. Second people can have a lot of motivation. For example, when they are about to give up, they try to achieve their goals hard again by remembering it. In addition, their mood rise by making a friend who have the same goals. Therefore I think setting clear goals is good idea.

I think so. First, by setting clear goals, the efficiency will (X rise→improve). This is because(X ,) people (X found that vhat to do nti→can understand what to do until) they achieve goals. As a result, they will (X accomplish→ accomplish them) with ease. Second people can have a lot of motivation. For example, when they are about to give up, they (X try→try hard) to achieve their goals (X hard) again by remembering it. In addition, their mood (X rise→will rise) by making a friend who (X have→has) the same goals. Therefore I think setting clear goals is (X good→a good) idea. 内容：4 / 4 構成：3 / 4 "As a result" の前にもう少し流れを繋ぐとより自然になる。 語彙：3 / 4 their mood will rise は feel more positive / feel encouraged などがより自然。 文法：3 / 4 冠詞・三単現・代名詞の一致 などまだ細かい修正ポイントがあるが、大きな崩れはない。 合計：13 / 16点（かなり良いですよ）