英検準2級ライティングの添削お願いします。 QUESTION Do you think it is a good idea for people to watch sports games at stadiums？ I think that it is a good idea for people to watch sports games at stadiums. I have two reasons. First, it really improves the quality of life in many ways. For example, it is fun for people to watch sports games, Second, it helps them learn many things. For instance, they can know a lot of rules.

よく書けてますよ they can know a lot of rules. だけ変です can know とは言いません learn です。 添削例 : For instance, they will be able to learn the rules of the sports they are watching, and many more. この部分も英語としてはあってるが、論理としては奇妙です： First, it really improves the quality of life in many ways. スポーツの試合を見ることが improve the quality of life in many ways するのでしょうか、あまりにも 唐突な主張です。 添削例： First, it gives people a good time. It's simply fun to watch sports games in person. スタジアムで生で見るわけだから その意味をあらわす in person