Last Call Review of draft-ietf-pim-light-08
review-ietf-pim-light-08-tsvart-lc-tuexen-2024-10-18-00

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Nits:

Section 2:
It looks strange to have text followed by a subsection containing a single
sentence.

Section 2.1:
Missing . at the end.

Section 3:
OLD:
In section 4.5 it describes that If a router
NEW:
In section 4.5 it describes that if a router

Section 3.2
Missing . at the end of first sentence.

Section 3.5
Missing . at the end of the second paragraph.

References
All are strangely formatted. Only the title should be enclosed in ",
there should be a link to the RFC, ...

References
OLD:
ambiguity of
NEW:
Ambiguity of
OLD:
Tuxen
NEW
Tüxen