Last Call Review of draft-ietf-pim-light-08
review-ietf-pim-light-08-genart-lc-knodel-2024-10-22-00

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Document: draft-ietf-pim-light-??
Reviewer: Mallory Knodel
Review Date: 2024-10-22
IETF LC End Date: 2024-10-18
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: Thanks very much for this concise draft on PIM Light.

Major issues: None

Minor issues: See nits for readability.

Nits/editorial comments: My comments are only focused on the readability of
this document. Here are some fixes:

 * intro: include section number, “as explained further in this document”

 * intro: expand acronym on first use (it’s in section 2.1 instead, “PIM-SM
 protocol including PIM-SSM as per”

 * section 3, perhaps indicate that the following subsections define those very
 specific scenarios and whether there could be more or not by saying “only”,
 “Due to these constraints, a PLI should be deployed in very specific
 scenarios.”

 * 3.2: spf has not yet been expanded in this document, “to the source using
 SPF with post-processing as described in”

 * 3.4: bfd has not yet been expanded in this document, “PIM Light is
 configured on can be protected via BFD or similar technology”