Crawford Gillian - Loved this, really vivid descriptions, especially it's trajectory. Like how it slowly gets more brutal, sort of stops being a plum when you start calling it "red flesh" and the "scarlet pith over my lips" really portrayed the great relation to love, even without the last couplet. It's got a great build-up, which is something you don't see in a lot of modern poetry. Fantastic!
Amazing.
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Crispy chips - wow this was so sensual and beautiful love how you didnt just eat a plum but took every moment to savior each taste right down to the core of the fruit and that last closing para was a wonderful way of ending it i love plums and nectarines where you can taste the sunshine in them /
Enjoyable
Liked: PJo • on Dec 30 2024 03:36 PM PST x rate: , , skip edit PJo
Amazing.
Enjoyable
Nicely written.