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Nominator: SecretName101 (talk · contribs) 17:56, 7 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: IntentionallyDense (talk · contribs) 05:40, 30 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

  • I will be reviewing this shortly. I use the GA Table and make most of my comments below the table so it is easier for nominators to respond to my feedback. I usually start with assessing images, stability, and sources then move on from there. I am fine with nominators responding to my feedback as it is given or all at the end. If you have any questions feel free to either ask me here or leave a message on my talk page! IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 05:40, 30 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
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1. Well-written:
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. Prose is good. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 03:31, 21 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. Relevant areas of MOS complied with. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 03:31, 21 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
2. Verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check:
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. reflist exists. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 01:49, 3 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). I checked the following sources and found no issues: [1][2][3][4][5][6][7][8][9][10]. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 01:49, 3 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
2c. it contains no original research. No OR. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 01:49, 3 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. written in authors own words. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 01:49, 3 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
3. Broad in its coverage:
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. Addresses main topics. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 03:31, 21 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). no needed details. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 03:31, 21 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. neutral, IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 03:31, 21 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. article is stable. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 01:49, 3 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. photo is tagged. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 01:49, 3 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. photo is relevant and captioned. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 01:49, 3 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
7. Overall assessment. On hold until SecretName101 responds to my feedback. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 18:11, 4 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

As shown above, this article meets all GA criteria. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 03:31, 21 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

  • This is optional but consider adding archive links for the paywalled sources. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 01:49, 3 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'm noticing quite a few small single sentence paragraphs such as Simpson began teaching as a political science professor... Simpson was a cofounder of the Independent Precinct Organization... Simpson served two terms as a Chicago alderman for the 44th Ward... These should either be expanded or combined into other paragraphs. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 01:49, 3 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
  • For criteria 1, 3, and 4 I usually read through the article carefully and provide feedback as I read. This often looks like me suggesting things be reworded, asking for further explanation etc. Oftentimes I will ask questions about the article that come from a place of not being educated on the topic. Sometimes these questions don't have answers or don't result in any changes needing to be made. I ask these questions so I can better understand the topic and thus better provide feedback. Throughout this process, I often make small changes to grammar or punctuation. I try to make these changes by section and if you disagree with any changes I make feel free to revert them! IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 01:49, 3 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
  • One thing I noticed is that your article doesn't include any criticisms of Simpson. I have a hard time believing that as a politician no one ever had anything critical to say about him. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 18:11, 4 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
    Nevermind ignore this point. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 19:47, 4 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
    Yeah, I am sure you noticed (hence why you withdrew this as a matter of concern) that there are critiques of him already in the article. For instance, the assessment from 1978 by Milton Rakove is not very flattering (Rakove seems to have felt that Simpson did not actually get much of anything done as a councilor member because he refused to make the pragmatic compromises that would have been needed to effectuate tangible change). Also, the article outlines that he passed very few ordinances of his own on the council, which is not a particularly positive thing to note about a legislator. SecretName101 (talk) 12:49, 5 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Early life

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  • "Dick" is his full first name (as opposed to "Dick" being a nickname for the first name "Richard", as it more commonly is). This sentence just doesn't quite flow right. I suggest something along the lines of Dick" is his full first name and not a nickname, as opposed to the common usage of "Dick" as shortened version of "Richard" or something like that. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 03:03, 3 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
    Maybe I'll go further and also make this a notetag rather than described within the body itself (since it is perhaps trivial to most readers, though important to some who might be seeking to research him further to know that legal records will use "Dick" as his legal name). SecretName101 (talk) 18:19, 4 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
    Sounds good. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 18:21, 4 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
  • He graduated from the University of Texas in 1963.[3] He received his PhD from Indiana University.[5] He spent some time in Sierra Leone completing research for his doctoral dissertation. this bit feels really repetitive and I feel like you could join some of these concepts together like so: After graduating from the University of Texas in 1963, Simpson received his PhD from Indiana University. He spent some time in Sierra Leone completing research for his doctoral dissertation.

Early career

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Aldermanic career

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Post-aldermanic career

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