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23 September 2023

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  • 22:4122:41, 12 September 2023 diff hist −103 Jake Lacy Removed unnecessary language, not appropriate for encyclopedia content. Separated sentence that had an unnecessary semicolon. Periods and commas are the workhorses of the English language and should be punctuation of first choice. Tags: Visual edit Mobile edit Mobile web edit

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22 August 2023

  • 18:4518:45, 22 August 2023 diff hist −406 Derrick Henry Since Wikipedia articles are to be a summary of the facts of the subject, quotations rarely achieve that limited goal. They should be either removed or paraphrased. In this case, paraphrasing was not necessary since the only thing the quote did was to prove what was already sufficiently stated in four simple words in the previous sentence. Also, we need to make efforts to not simply cut, paste and quote information from third parties, but to paraphrase there, also. Tags: Visual edit Mobile edit Mobile web edit
  • 18:3618:36, 22 August 2023 diff hist −9 D. J. Moore Removed unnecessary word. The word "previously" is almost never needed, if ever. When you make the verb past tense, that indicates "previously." Also removed a comma. A simple compound sentence does not need a comma. Tags: Visual edit Mobile edit Mobile web edit

21 August 2023

14 August 2023

  • 20:2920:29, 14 August 2023 diff hist −68 Walter Pidgeon Removed editorial content, specifically "...that his popularity reached its height." That is when Pidgeon's popularity was at its height? Says who? There is no source for such a statement, which makes it an editorial comment, which is never allowed. Tags: Visual edit Mobile edit Mobile web edit
  • 20:2520:25, 14 August 2023 diff hist −892 Walter Pidgeon Removing editorialized content. Recast sentences to reflect proper Encyclopedia style. Tags: Visual edit Mobile edit Mobile web edit
  • 20:1120:11, 14 August 2023 diff hist −56 Walter Pidgeon Corrected content to conform to encyclopedia style. Tip to editors: never write "as well as." "And" is always the preferred use. Never used three words when one word is sufficient. Tags: Visual edit Mobile edit Mobile web edit
  • 20:0820:08, 14 August 2023 diff hist −38 Walter Pidgeon Removed unnecessary content. We do not have to mention that Pidgeon had two marriages, we simply need only to mention the two marriages and people can count. Also, he did not marry the "former Edna Muriel Pickles." She wasn't the "former" Ms. Pickles until after they married. Tags: Visual edit Mobile edit Mobile web edit
  • 20:0020:00, 14 August 2023 diff hist −93 Walter Pidgeon Removed unnecessary con tent, and corrected grammar. Added a location and corrected a style error. Walter Pidgeon probably died eight days after a lot of people. Simply because someone with whom he had starred died eight days prior to him by is not relevant information. Tags: Visual edit Mobile edit Mobile web edit

7 August 2023

6 August 2023

  • 21:1321:13, 6 August 2023 diff hist +1 Dan Haggerty Restructured the awards list, so it was in a form that made sense to the reader. Just as fair warning, I am researching some of the claims made in this awards list, and I'm having trouble substantiating some. Those that cannot be verified will have to be deleted. I am digging deeply to try to substantiate them, even emailing the founders and/or presidents of the organizations involved. I hope I will be able to verify then. Tags: Visual edit Mobile edit Mobile web edit
  • 21:0921:09, 6 August 2023 diff hist −1 Kanab, Utah Corrected grammatical error. Tags: Visual edit Mobile edit Mobile web edit
  • 20:3220:32, 6 August 2023 diff hist +93 Dan Haggerty Restructured some sentences for proper style and better readability. Removed a questionable source and added a respected source. Tags: Visual edit Mobile edit Mobile web edit
  • 17:4017:40, 6 August 2023 diff hist −108 Johnny Unitas The source did not indicate that this subject was the first superstar of the game and one guy putting him in his top 10 quarterbacks does not indicate that this subject is "consistently" considered one of the top 10 quarterbacks of all time. Please do not editorialize in Wikipedia. Tags: Visual edit Mobile edit Mobile web edit

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  • 17:1117:11, 18 July 2023 diff hist −33 Phil Lynott Removed inclusion of the attendance of a particular person at the funeral for this subject. According to all I have read, there were many people at that funeral. The only time where it would be appropriate to acknowledge a person's attendance over others would be if that person was a head of state. Otherwise, it's just another person attending a funeral. Tags: Visual edit Mobile edit Mobile web edit
  • 16:4716:47, 18 July 2023 diff hist −55 Thin Lizzy Corrected grammar and style errors. A band, such as Thin Lizzy, is a single unit and is an "it" not a "they." Tags: Reverted Visual edit Mobile edit Mobile web edit

17 July 2023

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