I'm looking for poems that modernize this poem by William Shakespeare. This is my favorite sonnet by him, so much so that I have it memorized. If your entry doesn't follow the rules, it will be quietly removed. All poems are judged based on my own opinions, I do NOT take autorank into account and I keep names anonymous.


Rules:

1. Any style/format is welcome, as long as you keep it 14 lines or less. It can be as short as you want, and bonus points for a brevity that manages to capture the meaning and intensity of the sonnet. You can rhyme, not rhyme, rewrite the sonnet, turn it into a haiku, free verse it etc. Just don't go longer than the original.

2. It has to relate to the prompt. It's ok to be a bit experimental, but if I ask you how it relates, you need to be able to explain.

3. Don't make it any dirtier than the original please, the original is NSFW enough for me. I don't mind you updating language to make the puns more obvious to a modern reader, but I don't need super graphic modernized depictions of sex added on to it.

4. Try to avoid turning it overly political please. A little bit is fine, but I'd rather not have entire poems about politics instead of about thwarted love and longing.

5. You can edit as much as you want until the contest is judged.

Prompt:

Sonnet 20

A woman’s face with nature’s own hand painted
Hast thou, the master-mistress of my passion;
A woman’s gentle heart, but not acquainted
With shifting change as is false women’s fashion;

An eye more bright than theirs, less false in rolling,
Gilding the object whereupon it gazeth;
A man in hue, all hues in his controlling,
Which steals men’s eyes and women’s souls amazeth.

And for a woman wert thou first created,
Till nature as she wrought thee fell a-doting,
And by addition me of thee defeated
By adding one thing to my purpose nothing.

But since she pricked thee out for women's pleasure,
Mine be thy love and thy love’s use their treasure.