Early Review of draft-ietf-mpls-mna-usecases-04
review-ietf-mpls-mna-usecases-04-rtgdir-early-dhody-2024-04-13-00
Request | Review of | draft-ietf-mpls-mna-usecases-04 |
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Requested revision | 04 (document currently at 15) | |
Type | Early Review | |
Team | Routing Area Directorate (rtgdir) | |
Deadline | 2024-04-23 | |
Requested | 2024-04-09 | |
Requested by | Tony Li | |
Authors | Tarek Saad , Kiran Makhijani , Haoyu Song , Greg Mirsky | |
I-D last updated | 2024-04-13 | |
Completed reviews |
Rtgdir Early review of -04
by Dhruv Dhody
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Genart Last Call review of -11 by Vijay K. Gurbani (diff) Opsdir Last Call review of -15 by Linda Dunbar Rtgdir Last Call review of -11 by Bruno Decraene (diff) Secdir Last Call review of -12 by Yaron Sheffer (diff) Secdir Telechat review of -14 by Yaron Sheffer (diff) |
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Assignment | Reviewer | Dhruv Dhody |
State | Completed | |
Request | Early review on draft-ietf-mpls-mna-usecases by Routing Area Directorate Assigned | |
Posted at | https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/rtg-dir/e1yxYc0xrqocliUNifrYdaSHiu4 | |
Reviewed revision | 04 (document currently at 15) | |
Result | Has issues | |
Completed | 2024-04-13 |
review-ietf-mpls-mna-usecases-04-rtgdir-early-dhody-2024-04-13-00
I have been selected to do a routing directorate “early” review of this draft - draft-ietf-mpls-mna-usecases-04 The routing directorate will, on request from the working group chair, perform an “early” review of a draft before it is submitted for publication to the IESG. The early review can be performed at any time during the draft’s lifetime as a working group document. The purpose of the early review depends on the stage that the document has reached. As this review request was marked by the working group chairs as "In prep for WG last call", my focus for the review was to determine whether the document is ready to be published. Please consider my comments as if they are early last-call comments. For more information about the Routing Directorate, please see https://wiki.ietf.org/en/group/rtg/RtgDir Document: draft-ietf-mpls-mna-usecases-04 Reviewer: Dhruv Dhody Review Date: 13 April 2024 Intended Status: Informational ## Summary: ## Major: - Section 2.x, the listed use-cases lack text that can link them to MNA. Basically, how do they act as a use case for MNA? What indication and ancillary data will be carried? I can imagine how but it makes sense for the use-case I-D to be explicit about it for the reader. - Sections 3 and 4 read more as a requirement for the MNA solution and not as use-cases. Perhaps they could be rephrased? ## Minor: - I found the sentence "This document describes cases that introduce functions that are based on special processing by forwarding hardware." hard to parse. Consider rephrasing. Why hardware? - Add references for special-purpose labels and extended special-purpose labels. - We need to list a stronger motivation for MNA than just saving special-purpose label space. - Change RFC XXXX to RFC 9543 - The NRP Policy is not defined in RFC 9543, maybe the better reference is draft-ietf-teas-ns-ip-mpls? - Security consideration, while I agree with the text but consider having some useful pointers to other I-Ds could be useful. ## Nits: - Please add MNA in the title of the I-D - add "working group" at the end of the 2nd sentence in the abstract. Thanks! Dhruv